Thursday, 16 April 2020

Tristan’s writing

From Tristan

2 comments:

  1. Kia Ora Tristan,

    Well done, I love the extra touch you gave your leaf animal with the eyes and the descriptive words you have used in your writing. For your next step you could add a simile using the words as or like to compare. For example: It feels super smooth like silk.

    Keep it up,
    Miss Esselink

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  2. Hi Tristan,

    Your ant picture is very cool and I like how you have described it using your senses. I wonder what the ant might be doing during it's day, who might it meet? I look forward to seeing some more writing - well done.

    Mrs Hamilton

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